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Something wasn't right about her.

I narrowed my eyes at the girl at the door. "What's your name?" I pretended to be happy at the prospect of a new neighbor. The girl smiled happily, swinging back and forth. She appeared to be pretty energetic.

"My name is Cassie, nice to meet you." She put her hand out with a smile on her face. I hesitantly reached out, my hand clammy and shaky. No doubt I was in shock right now. My brother was gone and now I was next. Of course I was in shock. After what seemed like minutes, I grabbed her hand and shook it. I took my hand away, my breath was jittery.

"What's wrong?" Cassie asked.

"Nothing. Family issues. Don't worry about it." I said. "I'll talk to you later, okay?"

"Alright! Bye!" Cassie said as I shut the door.

I was numb. I didn't know what to do right now. Who was that girl? Why didn't she feel right when she was around? What was it? Paranoia was taking over my mind. I scratched the back of my head, sighing. I had to calm down. I sat down on the couch in the living room, holding my head. I was tired, but I couldn't sleep.

I couldn't. Sleep wasn't an option.

My mom numbly walked over to me, setting down the bottle of pills on the table in front of me, opening my hand and giving me 2 pills to take.

"The doctor said take these, 2 once a day." She said, waiting for me to take them.

I couldn't shove them away with my mom waiting beside me to take them. I gulped them down and my mom smiled numbly towards me. It was a fake smile, trying to make me feel better. Nothing could make me feel better right now. She got up, going up to her room. To cry, most likely.

My father left long ago. My brother, kidnapped and most likely murdered, now. Just me, and my mom left. I picked up the pills on the table. I was tempted to just down them, to end my pain, but wasn't that what he wanted? For me to die? Or was the Tall Man going to use me? I didn't know.

I wouldn't know until I got captured. I didn't plan for that to happen any time soon. I read the info on the pills..and I began to panic when I read over the side effects.

Drowsiness.
D R O W S I N E S S.

Oh no..no..no..no..no..

I put the pills down. These pills were going to put me to sleep. I couldn't take them again. Ever. I grabbed them, feeling tired already. The pills were already taking affect, and I was already tired to begin with. I walked to the kitchen and threw the pills out. I started to see doubles. My vision was failing on me. I smacked myself in the face to try to keep myself awake. I stumbled up to my room, sitting on my bed, resisting the urge to fall asleep as the sun set.

But things didn't work that way.

I blacked out.

I don't know how long I was out. I woke up in a junk yard - on the ground. I saw that girl, Crissie was it? No. Cassie. Not like it mattered. All I know is I saw her. How did she get here? I knew this junk yard. It wasn't far from home. Actually, right outside the neighborhood. I narrowed my eyes at her. I saw her necklace design, shining. I gasped. It was the O and the X, that was her necklace.

She was a Proxy. A person, under the influence of the Tall Man. Sent to get me. Fetch me. Kill me, maybe.

"What are you doing here?" Her voice called and she walked over to me. I couldn't move I was frozen in fear.

"This isn't no place to sleep." She said. Suddenly, she hit me, making me fall back. Then she was on top of me, choking me. Trying to knock me out. To take me to the Tall Man.

I gasped for breath, feeling around me for anything to hit her with. It was a junk yard, many blunt objects to fight with. A proxy could die, A proxy was human, human flesh, organs, blood.

My vision started to blur. I was getting knocked out. My hands felt a shard of glass large enough to grasp, I grabbed it firmly, jabbing Cassie in the side. She screamed, letting go of me, coughing, holding her wound. I instantly got up to my knees, coughing, gasping for breath. My eyes opened as I looked towards a bat, it had nails jammed inside of it.

The girl - Cassie, was crying now. The Tall Man didn't have hold of her anymore. But I couldn't risk it. Couldn't. Risk. It. I grabbed the bat, taking a few more breaths. I walked over to the girl, and raised the bat.

She looked up, her voice different now.

"Wait! No!" She yelled. No one could hear, the junk yard was a fortress of metal, her sounds echoing off of the metal, bouncing.

I hit her upraised face with the bat. She groaned, falling down completely. I kept hitting her, blood splattering on the bat, blood pooling on the ground.

"Die.." I breathed, "Die, die! JUST DIE AND LEAVE ME ALONE!" I screamed, doing the final hit on her pretty face.

Shock washed across my body about what I just did. I couldn't think about it now. Her face was unrecognizable, now. She probably wasn't even from here, maybe not even from this state. She most likely had gone missing long ago, presumed dead. I breathed, dropping the bat.

I had to hide her body, quickly. I found a fridge across the junk yard. I grabbed her feet, dragging her. No one came in here, anyways, but I felt a need to hide her. I opened the empty fridge, putting her in it and closing it. Blood traces were on my feet. I realised something as I looked around, seeing no one.

I had killed someone.

........
I started to walk back home.

........

Am I crazy?
Part 5 to I survived.

Part 4: [link]
part 6: [link]

Cover credit: :iconakirakirai:

And yeah, the little junk yard scene was inspired by Higurashi. I'm such a big fangirl of higurashi >3<!!!
Get me talking about it you wont ever hear me shush about it <3
I LUB RENA.
<3

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WELL THEN...
I have no clue why this is getting so much attention, I really don't o-o;
I'm happy about it though. I didn't expect so many views and favourites so fast.

Thank you guys ^^


Also, thank you for those who reminded me to put credit where credit was due, like that Higurashi reference. xD I sometimes, often actually, forget to do such things. Thanks :D

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:icongeminifille:
geminifille Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Higurashi + slender man=.... RUN
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:icontheflotinghead:
theflotinghead Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   General Artist
This gets so much attention because it's GOOD!!
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:iconwhenbordomestrikes:
whenbordomestrikes Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is awesome.. Now one of my favourite story series on dA.
I love the way you included all the facts and the character's past. Brilliant work!
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UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much! :)
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toxicwaste17 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
My name is Cassie.. so this is very unsettling..
But good job. I like the story so far :3
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh i'm sorry. :D NO NEED TO BE SCARED c:
Thanks! :3
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:iconpinkpandapony:
PinkPandaPony Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Holy sheight, this is good.. o_o Keep going!
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have no idea why this is getting so much attention xD
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:iconpinkpandapony:
PinkPandaPony Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Probably because it's one of the first things that pops up when you browse random stuff. The image that comes with it is really good, too, so that might be the reason. ^_^
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Maybe o-o I credit :iconakirakirai: for the cover though, it's her art. She's a great artist, check her out :D
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:iconpinkpandapony:
PinkPandaPony Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Will do. :D
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unknown-raven02 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
and now you get flagged. YAYZ FOR FLAG SPAM
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:iconmeanvector:
meanvector Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOA!!!!
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:iconnanami-yukari:
Nanami-Yukari Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
...Is the last part inspired by a scene in Higurashi..?
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:iconangrygood:
AngryGood Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
I thought of that too. First, she was being choked but found something to stab her attacker with. Then, she found another weapon and killed her attacker. And she even dragged her into a fridge. Just like Rena. And it was also in a junkyard. What..?
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Guiltyyyy. i love Rena. :) but yeah, I added credit. if there's ever a problem about copyright, I of course would never mind rewriting the part. I just loooveeee Rena. She's my.favourite.

<3
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:iconangrygood:
AngryGood Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Oh no, it's fine. I love Rena too. YANDERES <3
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
<3
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:iconnanami-yukari:
Nanami-Yukari Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, I already talked to her about it and she added credit, hopefully it's okay now./doesnotknowcopyrightlawsOTL
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I forgot haha xDDD
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, yep. I love rena :D +10 brownie points for you <3
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:iconnanami-yukari:
Nanami-Yukari Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, okay XD

I think it's better if you at least credit Higurashi though :)
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, ill put it in the description when I go home :)

I love Higurashi :)
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starsnow2577 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
That is amazing :D
Love the details :la:
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:iconwipeout-105:
wipeout-105 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
the black dog. amazing work
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ShortStack1315 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Story was gripping. I didn't want to stop reading:) Really good. Who's this Tall Man I wonder?
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The tall man is another name for the Slenderman.
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:iconkyriadori:
KyriaDori Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
That was awful.
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hi, I appreciate your opinion, but instead of saying it's awful, perhaps some constructive criticism is in order? It would be much better than just saying it's awful.
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:iconkyriadori:
KyriaDori Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Repetitive. Grammar. No drive.
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
May I ask what is so repetitive about it?
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:iconkyriadori:
KyriaDori Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I am not going to reread it and post all the sentences that would need to rewritten. Over all.
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't expect you to. I've been working on my writing, this is just practice. I appreciate your criticism, and i'll try to better myself. Thank you :)
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JonoGoh Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Absolutely LOVE this!
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:iconthealmightypig:
TheAlmightyPig Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Awsome awsome AWSOME art work and a chilling tale! Love it!!
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:iconmetyryuma:
MetyRyuma Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow, dark and cool, it's very epic :D
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:iconultralulzz:
UltraLulzz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, I didn't expect so many favourites..thank you guys! It means a lot :)
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:icontheunforgiven11:
TheUnforgiven11 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Dear god this is getting intense... Killing someone, things are getting serious.
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